…but this is no democracy!
Okay, so the votes are in and it came to a draw between the May 15 post and the post from May 8. However, I’ve had to come to an executive decision; I can’t show you the continuation of May 8th because *spoilers* so May 15th it is. Beginning with the last line from the previous post, here is the next seven paragraphs.
‘Your brother, he’s…dead.’
‘Oh gods!’ Laney cried. She felt as if a bomb had exploded inside her but no tears escaped. Karavere’s tears ran freely. For a moment, Laney hated Karavere with every inch of her being but the moment passed when she saw the guilt in Kara’s eyes. Gathering her friend in her arms, she stroked her head, whispering calm nothings. ‘It is not your fault, Kara.’ Laney sobbed, the tears now falling.
‘Isn’t it?’ the response sounded petulant even to Kara’s own ears.
‘No.’ Laney replied firmly, ‘We all made our choice. You chose your path and I mine. And, gods rest his soul, Malen chose his, even if it was not the path I would have chosen for him.’
Kara disentangled herself from Laney’s embrace, embarrassed. She wiped away the tears with a violent wrench of her hand. ‘I’m sorry, Laney. I shouldn’t… it’s just…’ the tears threatened again, a marauding army beating on the gate of her composure, ‘It reminded me of Brythorn. And I realised I had not thought of him in days. I…I do not want to forget. Do not ever forget, Laney. We have to remember. We have to.’
‘I know that, Kara. Memory is in our blood.’
‘I thought I knew it too. And I forgot. Blood means nothing if we do not keep it inside us.’ Kara stood, stretched, and whacked both walls, ‘I have things to attend to. The funeral will be tonight. If you need me, you know where to find me. And, Laney? Thank you.’ Feeling that enough had been said, Kara meandered back to her own rooms, lost in thoughts of a youth long past and an uncertain future.
That night, under the light of the funeral pyre lit like a beacon high upon the city walls, the first of the Haelean army arrived.
Now, before you protest too strongly, I know it’s the 12th today and because I’m nice, here is 5 x 2 lines of a related passage. Between this, May 8th and May 29, you should be able to put two and two together. 🙂
Kara glared sharply at the woman sitting across from her, ‘How much do you know?’
‘Lord Thoren told me when he hired me to kill you.’
‘What?’ Kara jumped to her feet in alarm.
‘As I told you, if I wanted you dead, you would be already.’
‘Oh, well that’s comforting.’ Kara replied sarcastically.
Eriden stood, ‘I must go but please, my lady, consider what I have said.’
Kara waited until her guest was at the door before calling her back, ‘Wait! If you want to prove your loyalty, find enough evidence to convict Thoren of murder.’
‘It would be my pleasure.’
25 thoughts on “You cast your votes…”
‘Memory is in our blood.’ Quite beautiful and the truth for many after war (or in this case intrigue?). Very nicely done.
I’m glad you liked that line. I wasn’t too sure of it myself, it felt a bit too grandiose and poetical.
“It would be my pleasure” so dramatic , so intriguing. love the ‘As I told you, if I wanted you dead, you would be already.’ 🙂
HA! I won! *dances*
Wait… that was the wrong reaction, and I’m far too invested in a poll. Sorry. O.o
I am glad you continued the scene, though. I figured he’d died, but this is a very rewarding follow-up. Thank you.
Glad you liked it 🙂 And yes, there wasn’t many things for him to be.
“…A UNICORN!” 😉
Now that would have been a plot twist.
‘Laney, I’m so sorry. Your brother, he’s…sparkly!’
‘No! He can’t be a…’
‘A unicorn. Yes.’
Laney breaks down and cries 😛
Ha! Twist and a half.
“That night, under the light of the funeral pyre lit like a beacon high upon the city walls, the first of the Haelean army arrived.” I absolutely love this line. So dramatic and foreboding.
🙂 It’s one of my favourites.
Really exciting excerpt you’ve posted here, even if I didn’t vote for it!! Who killed Laney’s father? That’s what I want to know. Could it be Thoren??
I totally agree with Kathi about that dramatic last line. The shock of finding out such terrible news about her brother being like a bomb exploding inside her rings true. A very satisfying continuation from the 15th May!
Ooo, ooo, ooo! I think I figured out the connection! Probably.
Have you? 🙂 Reply to this comment with what you think the connection is. If it’s too spoilery, I’ll just edit it out but I really want to know what you think the connection is 🙂
Thoren was Kara’s husband. Laney is her sister-in-law. A while ago (maybe years but not necessarily) Thoren tried to have Kara killed, at which point Kara started a series of events, in trying to find evidence against him, that eventually led to his death and possibly even the invading army. It’s possible the woman who accused him of hiring her may have been lying in order to manipulate Kara.
Some points are on the right track but the connection is not so overt. Laney does not necessarily have anything to do with this part of the plot but there was a line Kara said when talking to Laney about her brother’s death that connects it all 🙂
Well, I tried. Close-ish is better than way off. 🙂
I still have no idea what’s going on, but I’m just coming into this story! I don’t expect to know. Sorry I missed the poll! got all caught up in life. Love the straight-forward nature of the second excerpt.
See? I knew I would get an awesome post to read whatever the vote was–I was right! I love being right. 😉
You know, on that Unicorn thread you and Kate were discussing up there–being sparkly might just be a perfect reason to kill the man. Or to at least hide him from virgins…
And yes…. mmm, yes, perfect ending line about the approaching army.
“the tears threatened again, a marauding army beating on the gate of her composure” – Great description! And exactly what it’s like in a situation like this. And I second Raewyn’s comment about the “Memory is in our blood” line. Gorgeous passage overall!
‘The tears threatened again, a marauding army beating on the gate of her composure.’ I love that description there. Like Adrian, I’m just coming into this story (didn’t participate in the poll either. Likewise, life’s circumstances dragged me by the heels last week). Enjoying the intrigue!
I love the description in this section, especially this part: That night, under the light of the funeral pyre lit like a beacon high upon the city walls, the first of the Haelean army arrived.
Can’t wait to see how this all ties together!